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Jimmy dreams of growing up to be a detective to one day find his father that walked out on him and his mother two years ago. He runs it over again and again in his head, finding him in a coffee shop somewhere in Paris. He'd have a trenchcoat and maybe a mustache, and Dad would say to him, "I did it for you, son. I knew you'd find me some day. I knew the world would need a detective like you."

It's a source of friction between him and his mother, and during an argument he forgets to close the door and the dog runs out. Grabbing his trusty magnifying glass and looking for clues, Jimmy tracks the dog across the neighborhood. It had smelled its former owner, and when Jimmy grabs its collar, he sees his father across the street, walking into a convenience store. He takes the dog back, hardly noticing the magnifying glass in his hand.

That night, Jimmy's mother hears a repetive smacking sound in the basement. Jimmy was punching a bag full of sand. He wasn't training to be a detective anymore-- he was training to be a boxer.

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  1. Interesting. I say go for it! Write what you need to do! XD


  2. Sounds pretty cool.  

    But why did Jimmy change his mind?  What about seeing his father then suddenly made everything different.  

    How did the dog smell the father from so far?

    And why was the dad so close in the first place?  Wouldn't he try to stay away from the family he left behind?

    I really like the idea of a boy hoping to become a detective so he can track down his father, and then suddenly training to become a boxer after seeing his father at last.  I think that's great.  I just think you could work out the details a bit (or maybe you just didn't bother telling us yet, lol). ^^

  3. The hero will be Jimmy, yes?  

    There will be no physical harm to either parent, yes?

    Who is your audience, what is the age group you are writing to?

    Boxers face death each time they enter the ring.  Is Jimmy going to contend with that aspect?

    How violent will the story be?

    The beginning idea is quite entertaining and I think it has potential for full development into a novella for adolescents.

  4. I thought it was a little random. Also, what made the father so sure that abandoning his son would make him into a detective? Lastly, the whole trench coat and magnifying glass thing was a huge detective cliche, and I think the story would fare better without him fitting within it.

  5. I think it would work best as a short story. But its a good idea! :)

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