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Question

Films also allow audiences to break free from the problems of their every day life and dive into a completely different reality. Within a comedy, horror, or fantasy, a viewer can take a break from the ordinary and enjoy an escape. Some films even end without answer, leaving the audience to create their own idea of what the shadowed areas could mean. Viewers may be hypnotized in the film during the running time, yet left with a feeling of inquiry lingering on in the imagination for days. The most unique and imaginative people are required, as well as every type of art, to collaborate such work.

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thats a paragraph in the middle of my art statement towards why i wanna create muuuveeeiizzzz, required for the art institute i'm attending in san francisco this summer :):)

i'm beyond terrible with grammar. writing as well, although i love to do it. anyways, i just turned 16 so don't expect the best.

i need someone to revise that paragraph to me.

so it sounds better.

thank you !!

Answer 1

not much wrong in the grammatical side of the paragraph >you are trying to tell that films leave different types of impressions on one minds also some movies give an ending to be decided by the viewer.Moreover its a time one can relax in a movie hall.So on & so forth

Answer 2

what the ****??? this is sooo wrong. i did a report on that and that is wrong!!!! the source u used is terrible!

Answer 3

the paragraph is fine. i write stories more than papers though. i am from san francisco and surrounding area so sf is an awsome place to go. but i like berkley better!!!!!!!

Answer 4

Films also permit audiences to break free from the problems of their every day life. It allows them to dive into a completely different reality. Within a comedy, horror, or fantasy, a viewer can take a break from the ordinary and enjoy a visual escape.

Occasionally films unlike movies even end without a true answer, leaving the audience to create and visualise their own idea of what the shadowed areas could represent. Viewers may be hypnotised in the film during the running time, yet left with a feeling of enquiry lingering on in their imagination for days. The most unique and imaginative people are required to create a film, as well as every type of art, to collaborate such a masterpiece.

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I just changed some of the words to synonyms, and fixed a few misspellings.

For a sixteen year old that's fantastic work!

Good luck and I hope I helped :)