"Just A Simple Dance"?

Question

Please rate my poem.... Tell me if its good or not... Thanks

"Just a Simple Dance"

It’s just a dance that made me shiver

A dance that brought me out

The lights that have me wanting

To close my eyes & face you wild

T’was my heart that has been broken

Who told me to dance with you

To make myself relax a bit

And find someone interestingly new

It was the music that teased me

To sway my hands, body and soul

The Band who’s shouting “come party!”

Erased my last will and control

I did not took you for granted

I never used you to escape

All I know is that I felt something

While you danced my heart away

I wish our dance was longer

To know your whereabouts

Of how we’ve met each other

Or why we’ll always be apart

While the music slowly faded

Our bodies lost its touch

We drifted farther than ever

Realizing the moments’ last

A tear escaped my tired eyes

A trinklet more down my face

Because I knew how much I’ve lost

For Just a Simple Dance I’ve craved.

Answer 1

You have some nice thoughts and images going but you need more work on meter to make this shine.  Read aloud to feel the areas that are "choppy".  This has merit, editing will improve the offering.

Answer 2

"Hi!"

That was a very spectacular dance, which danced my heart away.

WELL DONE!  : )