"Rachel is a cat when they utter a pitiful meow" do you think this is a good metaphor?

Question

I just want to know if this is a good metaphor? if not can you help me to make it better?

Answer 1

It's not good English.  Neither Rachel or a cat can be described as "they".

When she doesn't get her way, Rachel is an cat with its claws out.

You and I must know the same Rachel!  :-)

Answer 2

A metaphor is a comparison of the similarities between two completely different things.

By wording it the way you did, how do I not know that Rachel is not the cat's name?

Try this:

"Rachel is like a cat uttering a pitiful meow."

Answer 3

Rachel is a cat with a pitiful meow.

Answer 4

Grammatically it should be "Rachel is a cat whe it utters a pitiful meow."