"When i'm with you.." new poem. tell me what you think!

Question

“When I’m With You”

Brittany Evanko

After I see you from a long day

Sometimes we have nothing to say

We just lie still and hear our hearts race together.

I feel as if time should stay still forever.

Feeling you brush your fingers through my hair,

I blink twice, just to believe you’re really there.

The taste of your kiss sends chills up my spine.

The feelings I have are too strong to define.

Your scent follows me even when you’re not there.

When I’m with you, nothing in this world can compare.

Answer 1

I think YOUR POEM demonstrates what do feelings mean:

"When I’m with you, NOTHING in this world can compare."

There is a bridge between you and the highest energy in the world, the love, who cannot be there but through the soul.

You shall never need something else, because nothing compares with LOVE.

(As someone can look for something else, they shall never be satiated; more precisely, they get Nothing.)

I'm happy for you!

You have ALL - Dreams, Poems, Wealth, Health, LOVE.

You have a lot to offer

Answer 2

poems are q***r

Answer 3

That was amazingly beautiful! I loved it!

You've used really good words and readers can understand clearly how you are feeling. Nice job!

There's nothing much for you to improve, because that was really great! But if I'd have to give advice, I'd tell you to be more flowing in your poem. Add some more transitions.

Nice job! Loved it! =D

Answer 4

that deep, i love it. you are a natural.

Answer 5

Thats really really cute :) I like the different things you said in it like "We just lie still and hear our hearts race together.", i thought that sounded really good.

Answer 6

You are talented! Keep it up!

Answer 7

I think

dont publish your love letters,

its personal.